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you used the word fuck alot, and it helps the flow, but it was excessive use in a way. that is my only real complaint, everything flowed smooth in my head and it was a concept done before, but you did it justice. This is a pretty good piece, and I enjoyed it alot, with just that complaint, which didnt take away from the piece, but you didnt really need it
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Hey bruh. Overall the flow was on point throughout the piece which was good. What was really cool was the ending and how it tied the whole piece together. I think the adition of fucks was good idea as they showed frustration and anger but they also detracted in the way they sort of invaded a few of the images, making them a bit weaker. My favorite image would be of the Grip Reaper. Great emotion throughout. Good job
This was a very interesting read right here.The opener was pretty goo to me cuz it came pretty strong.And the flow to your piece went very well and steady too.The Imagry was aight but I think you could have done better with it.And the emotion in this piece was pretty strong.And the vocabulary in this piece you use was very good too.Overall I think this was a pretty good piece right here to read.Hope to se more from you soon.
that was sick i like it a lot
Thanks everyone who has replied.
okay piece ... Common tho.
... in this piece it flowed real good. also the stucture was perfect, and you used some what good vocabulary, although it was present tense,but the content sounded goood. you also provided some good imagry, so your visionary was on point. emotion was all there. keep dropping good science fams...
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