"This is George."

I believe that I read this peice before but never left feedback, here it is man.

Great peice. Love you're work Atticus. The wording was great and flow was nice and smooth. The Creativty an structre was basic yet wonderful and the Emotion was tremendous. The Imagenation was well done here and overall a great peice Atti. Keep at it man.

~Belligerant.

Please RTF.

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Originally Posted by Atticus

The actual premis of the piece is that this character, George, comes off to the community as a model/perfect citizen but he has these insecurities in actuallity about being looked at and by attention and what not. And it speaks of his one error- a failed previous marraige, and how he still goes to visit with his ex, Diane, every 3rd or forth Sunday. But, you don't learn until the end of the piece that, he actually killed his ex wife, and is visiting the body that he left in the park woods.

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ok and he praised the bull - god all along i pressume


the satanic bastard

Atticus, once again, you've filled the page with soul-piercing insight. Your end-line couplets pulse like a heartbeat, and the occasional slant-rhymes create erratic palpitations that penetrate beyond George's amiable veneer to the heart of his dubious essence. The underlying sinister tone combines well with your elegant linguistic decorum to capture the bittersweet aftertaste of a once-glorious capitalist who has succumbed to the inevitable gravity of a trampled love--a ubiquitous fate that permeates much of contemporary America--all masterfully dramatized by your stark, heart-rending narrative.