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nice piece guy, I like the imagery and the sense of creativity you have here, expresses your point, nice job.
hit up my piece, worth reading and HOF might I add.
Rhymescheme and flow were a little off & like previously stated.. a bit repetitive. But other than that i can appreciate you trying to do something unique.
Can't seem to see where the rhyme scheme was off fore the syallble count was damn near perfect. must be how you read it...and as far as the flow it was based off multi's...and I'd appreciate better feed seeing that you're one of the more mature writer's here..
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