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Hard to judge this battle for me since you wrote on two completely different topics. So for me it basically comes down to the better poetic style which makes it close.
Constance...i felt you wrote very nicely, although your line breaks made the read choppy because of the way you capitalize every line. If the sentence is a continuation, use lowercase. I liked your story and the way you presented it. imagery was well brought out and i was interested in the read
Witness....felt you didn't bring anything new to the table, a new poem on an common topic with nothing BLAM that made it stand out from the others, your poetic style was very nicely done, and i thought you did a good job of trying to incorporate metas in there.
Vote- Constance for overall more enjoyment
Damn this was a very good battle...
Con....you had a more entertaining drop...with a lot of high points for imagery and wording...you stayed consistant with what you were trying to get across...and I loved how you really played off the pic..as well
Wit....wow....This piece really made me think...as I could agree with what you were stating...You edged into a more realistic piece as Con's was more entertainment...but that wasn't the only thing...you really made me want to see what was in the next line and that's what this is all about...the interest of the reader and the deliverence of the writer...and I felt that you had the better deliverence...
tis was a very hard decision but I'ma have to go with Wit on this one based on the above statements...though I really enjoyed both pieces...
v- Wit...
Well i have to say a very good battle here guys good job, so...this was a hard decision to come to cause both verses were very nice, constance i liked your piece it had a nice rhythm to it and and vocabulary and emotion were very good, i liked the description you was giving aswell in your piece it stood out nicely and overall good drop. - Witness your verse was solid and it read so nice the vocabulary and emotion in this piece matched and just peaked constance's piece and brought a better more powerful piece to the table if you get me, overall i'm going to have to say that the witness will get my vote in this because his drop just left me with a sense of wow that was nice after i had read it aiight constance but you shouldnt feel bad cause your drop was top notch.
Wordage I'm just glad I got to battle someone as good as wittness, getiing one vote was good enough for me, now i got 2 that's a blessing lol, but thanks for the votes fam win or lose i'll respect wittness the same and the voters thats real.
although both of these poems were nice Im gonna have to give constance my vote, both your schemes were on point and u stuck on topic. constance had better imagery and overall poem. vote-constance
This was close and i thought you both came real good and i liked the poetic vibe i got from this... i think constance had a nice jazz type feeling to it that worked out well, but i felt like the rhymescheme could have been way better even tho the vocab was nice... it just seemed more of a poetic piece than a topical piece and it's just not as appealing as the style witness went for. Witness had a more rap feel to it while keeping it poetic and deep... i think the way witness approached this was better, but constance came more original with the idea... still witness's was just more entertaining to me... so yeah..
v/witness
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...al-339563.html
Thanks for the vote.. .
I'm not really a fan of poetry battles, but i have to say this was a dope battle man..
It was a very very very close battle..Both of you came with vocab, and flow..Constance had some nice vocab, and i really liked the pic to go with you piece, it worked out pretty good..And your imagery was good, but not great...Witness your imagery was great, and your vocab was cool, and i enjoyed your piece, as much as Constances'. So i have to give this to Witness, for enjoying it a little bit more..
V/The Witness.