Love.

Ooooooooooo, damn... pleasantly suprised with this one. I don't think I've read anything from you yet, but this piece was great. Extremely poetic, yet, aware enough of topical fundamentals to establish itself as Om rather than misplaced poetry. The concept of love, of course is very done, and as I've learned with that topic- however simple it seems, it's very easy to fuck up. You, did not. Nothing incredibly jaw dropping when it came to creativity in approach, but the emotive and poetic techniques you chose to use were executed almost perfectly. I'm debating putting this in HOF, it's bordline though due to the brevity of it... we'll see.

If you could,
Hollywood ft. Darfur

Wow thanks for the feed man appriciate it. More Feed.

Rizzle.

this was good...I really enjoyed the thought and detail you put in this...vocab was great and at times I think I needed a dictionary but all is good..I liked the concept as well i give you a 9.5/10 only because no work is truly perfect :) keep it up

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Rizzle.

Feed please.

Hmmm...like i've told yo before this was very very good and your adapted style is very fluid and emotive. Plus i beleive you tied it with the image good to further enhance the effect that the wrods had. I believe this is probably your current best piece though i'm sure if you carry on working you can only get better an mean. Like it has been said previously, this had a good balance or i could say a good fusion of topical and poetics..this is the kinda piece where the line between topicals and poems gets a lil cloudy lol..overall i very good piece, i'm personally debating on wether i should nominate it or not, you already know the reasons lol...also...if you could poll your vote it would be great, thanks.

Thanks man. Feed.

*Pushes it to the top*

dope piece friend. much more touched up with poetry than anything, emotions were overwhelming. I know you well and this piece was up to par with my standards of you. All the qualities of a good poem, emotion, word choice, decent scheme for an OM, and imagery was just right. very played topic, but nicely done on your behalf, i'm sure a lot of people end their lives this way, love man, its hard and thats that you expressed that well in this. props man.

rtf on the piece that i post up soon aite. thanks.

peACE

hmmm...this is the second piece ive read today that is really
unique style wise, and i must say shit is real eloquent fam,
i mean your flow looked and felt like it didnt work, yet it did
if that makes any sense lol, to make it more clear...dope
your vocab or rather word choice just added that xtra bit
of spice, and for the topic love u managed to make it interesting
and fresh,very well explored for how short the piece actually
is,overall solid piece , the only thing i hated was that second
verse in blue, i know that fucking song from somewhere, i
cant get it out of my head, though i dont know who sings
it, and its pissing me off...put me outta my misery lmao,
nice anyway...keep rippin those scripts...RTF hit the link, peace

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=316236

that song is from Pinocchio.

this is a great piece of love...man you came unique yet you kept it real conservative for each stanza that was coming next ya know and you really didnt come expected you came in a real some what original way with the pic aswell was koo man real real deep man i iked the metaphors aswell...the wordage aswell was thought out and really wasnt cramped nor was it too much overused at all man really i liked this pice man keep it up!>

RTF on the link in my sig!

This was a pretty good piece man. I liked how it tied together with the picture so well especially. The wordlplay was nice with Imagery that blew me away. Despite it being so short it caught my attention immediately and I almost felt obligated to read the rest. Lol. It could've had better internals but the vocab. made up for it I suppose.

Quote:

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Wilted petals of a lilly bud.
Dispursed on a canvas of mind.
Subtle tears inept in blood.
Disguised animosity.........
..to which my hearts confined.

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^ My favorite part.

The topic was played which made the piece all that much better that you managed to write somethin' so good on Love. I guess that means...Maybe all topics aren't played ? Lol. Keep up man.

RTF on the first link in my sig please.