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This was a very deop piece....well put together....I guess I was sleep on you huh..!..the imagery and wording were the standouts in this piece...you really put alot into this piece detail wise...The structure was good your multi's were nice...and I liked how the rhyme scheme had a type of jumping affect..one thing this piece really had was complexity...ya vocab was nice and you didn't over due it ....nothing really seemed forced....it all flowed well as I read it...onverall nice drop....
^^cool thanks for that forum, leave a link i will mos def RTF,^^all links hit
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This piece was solid. Had a lot of well done lines and the rhythm was good. I enjoyed reading it despite the length, like many other people also said, I suppose it just must be true that length is a little bothersome cuz we're lazy, but even so we read the entire thing because it was good enough to make us read it =D
Nice job with pretty much everything, it's not exactly a 10, but it's really good.
^^Thanx for that, and yerr tbh i think the structure makes it look
longer than it actually is, but i do agree... thanx again
leave a link, and i got you, mos def rtf....