Through Whispering Words

Now this was a great piece....very well written...the multi's were like rapid fire on the battlefield...constantly hittN....The topic was good and the take and the drop's content were put together exceptionally well...The emotion was all through out the piece from the first line to the last...The imagery was crazy as I envisiond most of it while reading...Overall this was a very good piece The best I've read today by far...

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The pain gnawed, away her heart, as she withdrew resentment
The rain would applaud, every moment she redrew contentment
The gain shook abroad, as the rain faded, and seemed suspended
The same hook would maraud, as every smile gleamed ‘pretended’

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^^^My favorite stanza...RTF in sig plz...

Thanks for the feed people :) I'll get to your pieces real soon, I've been busy lately.

Peace - Uppin.

Bump.

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Originally Posted by B.Nesse

whoa whoa whoa, that was sick seriously, loved every line...and the italics even brought the scenery to life, great word usage, flow was outstanding, i fuckin loved the whole concept and idea you were using, the emotion was there it could have been shown a little more but either way, your message still came across well...beautiful storyline and great closer

forreal. very nice, very creative, very real :thumbup:

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took the words right out my mouth. THIS WAS EFFIN DOPE FAMMO.

HIT UP THE SECOND LINK IN MY SIG

Thanks for the feed guys. Uppin.

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I loved this peice man. The Wordplay was incredible and you had every word right where it should be. The Flow was constant and I like that. The Imagenation was great and wild. The Creativty was perfect bringing me to this ill style of a font. The Story was incredible. PM me for Colab details man..

Link @ Bottom of sig. RTF.