The Barrel

i liked this collab a lot it was deep and thats wat i like in it good vocab by both good imagery both had some good multi's and meta's

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The journey that awaits me, I'm unaware of it until it surface
Accompanied by my own kind, I'll tell you why I'm still nervous
Their main intention, is 2 keep us couped up like in detention
4 us 2 grow is their prevention, keepin 'no way out' da focus of our attention
Did I mention, I'm tough within w/ rough skin that's hard and firm
Jus cuz I walk around gettin' my feet wet, they think I'm not smart 2 learn


In this sea of a world I've currently been thrown in a hole
for we are all here for a purpose in which none of us know
Positioned over-populated, cramped and all for one mission
once you hender intuitions and give the side a good gripping
Is when he under you notices your pushing and his slipping
Hopeing and wishing you company he in this unlabled prision


overall really good collab good job keep up the writing

Forum: great approach, as soon as you began it never went off topic from that point on, i loved your word usage and vocabulary, your imagery was good aswell, i could picture mostly all of the descriptions you conveyed, you seemed very passionate about the topic i could tell by the mood and tone of your whole verse

Relli Mak: when you began, it wasn't grasping me the way Forum's opening did, but along the middle of your verse it began to become more and more appealing, the only thing i didn't like about your word usage is that in some places you needed stronger words and sometimes the opposite was needed, other than that your flow was easy to follow and your closing was perfect...great depiction again from both of you

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kool dude!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1