Yup thanks for the extensive comments Atticus...i've read half of your piece but distractions stop me reading it all, i'll get it before this week ends no doubt. Once again thanks..i'll try branching out soon lol^.
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Yup thanks for the extensive comments Atticus...i've read half of your piece but distractions stop me reading it all, i'll get it before this week ends no doubt. Once again thanks..i'll try branching out soon lol^.
thankx for the feed Atticus! appreciate it ! Now that's how you leave feed. I'll RTF in a minute.
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this was a nice collab...nothing forced in here..though the concept of this is sorta played you all approached in predictable ways but gave your cerses all a twist to make it somewhat original in a way...you all brought forth your besta nd made it well worth the longread...the multies in this were great and the metaphors that were implamented were just finely assigned..great job all of you for doing such a nice collab..you all blended and never strayed off topic....nice vocaba nd content....emotion in this piece was divine as all of you grabbed it and stride!..nice job again...
ok besides paka and forum the rest of you RTF on samantha C. Hensley link in the sig
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uppin for feed will return feed
i left you guys a full page of feed ... you going to hit that link or what?
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Originally Posted by atticus
COunt on it i will get it before the week ends as i had said, it's Eid time i'm celebrating...just came on in college to see what's going on lol
word i have been busy but toda is early realease so i should hit it up about 2:00 pm eastern time aight
“There went out another horse that was red;
And power was given to him that sat thereon
To take peace from the earth,
And that they should kill one another;
And there was given unto him a great sword.”
I ride, my sword raised, equipped for conflict
Without soul or conscience, focused on a single target
My presence ends worldly peace, for it is in the scripts
When the red horseman rides, the end of the world has started
Bloody corpses, and lonely horses, decorate this barren land
Men fight for breath, they fight to death, not one survivor stands
Blood drips unto the sallow sand, marking the end of man
I wreak havoc, my lord’s takeover has gone to plan
I’m contraband, from a haunted land, hell is where I hang my hat
I walk earth in bodily form, A horseman of four, a god of war
Countries fight for power….not knowing they’ll all be trapped
In the web of lies, that my lord has spun, they’re hopelessly strapped
For when I ride, the black horseman follows suit
Apocalyptic demons, roaming this dying world for our loot
So beware, this is the beginning of the end, for your populace
Because when Hell rises, you will be destroyed with haste
this whole fuckin verse was the shit. shit was good. i'm speachless.
Yup Witness is dope^...links returned.
uppers and yeah wit is dope as all hell so is pak and x and forum lol
Exhaled a saliva constructed of words that made my homes
In the lobes of listeners, they glistened my bow with stones
the parts i read and dug some.--=
Yet he conquers men in ten folds a tenfold of lands owned
Honed democratic skills to write bills instructing sadistic kills
Scene stills I see a matrix of rationed blood spilling, life loaned
Brave stoned & the wise scribes voluntarily digest gullibility pills
nice rhyme skills involved here for real.........wording and imagery was crafted well
and my feedback is somewhat cut short for reasons of fair judgement
so
bless
DOPENESS. Bump
upppinng err mandid flee