Hit & Run

deep shit i like the way u drop it story nica man
keep rappin fo real

not a bad piece at all . . . . .flow was dope . . . structure was iffy but other touched on that . . . . i felt that maybe if you used more multis it would make the piece more enjoyable . . . . story and concept was pretty cool, maybe add some metaphors in there to get a more descriptive tone, other than that . . . . shizzle the nizzle, pizzle

thanks for the feed, even though you obviously didnt read mine.

the structure and flow was horrible, just utterly disguisting in a bad way. i could flow better in second grade. shorten your lines and try to match syllables, also try rapping or saying it out loud to improve on this.

however, you made up for it with deep emotion. the vocabulary was not bad. this would have been DOPE if you didnt fuck up so much on the flow. but overrall i really liked it. do the things i said and you could have the potential to be a big name on here.

check out my new piece, "crossed the line"

To say it was yo first it was already.Shit I post somthing I wrote niggaz said it was straight garbage. It was alright to me

thanks for all the feed and Junio i am sorry if it sounds like i didn't read it but i did i would never try to do that i respect these OM's too much

Wow. Other than the Obv.~ structure problem that wasn't even that bad, I'd have to say I liked it more than I'd expect I would. It was an excellent piece and I found to have not that much problem reading because of the good imagery. Good piece, keep up. Check 'The Legend of the Madman' if you can.

thanks for the feed

though the structure was off. the eomtion made up for that. the imagery was crazy like i could envision every moment as I read through it. This is one of the better unstructured drops i've seen from you...Good Shit. keep at it.