Follow The Leader

uppin this once more and I will get to the links ASAP guys

Nice drop homie haven't read one of your pieces in a minute i guess you haven't drop'd lately, but the imagry was impressive the only thing that stood out to me was the lessened vocabulary which could've been so much better but it was worded well and flowed good the emotion was beautiful i was really feel'n this drop homie especially these lines qouted below

The master plan is tarnished, yet we can try to fix it
Follow your heart, not your mind, that is the mission
Though inconsistent, if we cotinue to stay persistent
We can know how to follow the path of our existence

Props homie

RTF

Nice;

The wording was nice. the flow was great and smooth. The emotion was deep and I understood you're meanings clearly. The structre was wonderful. Nice Imagenary and Creativty. Keep up the great work. Kit up Music With Melody.

~Blind

this was an impressive piece considering it was your first yet. there's definately a competent sense of know-how, so i assume you write alot even if not in open mic format usually. the storyline was cool, good sequence and fluency to the content which is rare in a new writer - esp. on this site. your faults are definately in your diction/word placement, and in your flow and rhyme scheme. at this point, your storytelling and contectual properties exceed the level your basics are at ... so i'd suggest working on your fundementals by incorperating some assonance and alliteration while still working with multi-syllable rhyme schemes and internals. with the diction thing, it's really hit or miss - just a feel kind of thing. it's all just trial and error, but just read other's works and you'll start to learn how the placement of a single word could make all the difference in the fluency of both your content and your meter. keep writing/reading, you'll get it.