I don't know how to put this

oh yeah feebs could you RTF on my piece "The Long Journey Home" in my sig

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Originally Posted by Feeble

So old memories are sometimes held onto, sometimes shattered & despised
As I try to decide if I even mattered in their lives

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dont worry feebs, you matter in a text battlers life

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Originally Posted by Pens Ill

dont worry feebs, you matter in a text battlers life

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^^reply like that again = blockage :-)

i was just joking brix

feebs know what he writes is dope :)

yeah, i'll get to everyone's piece, dont worry. i only got to daz so far. ill get to some more later today.

:)

lol i came back to hit up some links... but nobody left any links...

responded to daz's piece rainbow colored dreams and bounce's piece ink blots.

well feeble shit was defenitly sumtin i could relate 2 cuz i 2 miss home where did high school n every1 want me back but sumtimes life dont work dat fast...funny thing is i guess it counts if ur well known round here cuz i dropped a om like yesterday n gave da proper amount of links needed when i posted it but it still got closed....brix dont do dat dirty damn im new on this site but not new 2 the basic rule of thumb when comin on these things i got my links so open it up for me so peeps can have sumtin 2 reply 2 cuz i aint droppin nuttin new til i finish da audio version of the track i posted in om..well enough rambling bout me...good piece keep postin....peace

If you send brix a PM, including your two links, he will reopen your thread. Only reason he doesn't close mine is cuz he luhs me

;)

This was a really nice read I flowed well but i honstly feel like it is kinda rushed and force but the worplay was good and all in all it was good

I think your reply was kinda rushed. mu'fucka

I miss the years where Basketball & Goldeneye were my main concerns
and school was just a distraction because it was lame to learn
& I never truly applied the advice "never take it for granted"
Not to the people I knew, nor the breaks I was handed
sometimes fate leaves you stranded, in a painful, not uplifting display
the same way that my best friends sort of drifted away
And it's sad cuz I knew as it happened. i wasn't taken by surprise
Feeling like a spectator in my own life. Just making my goodbyes,


Those are my favorite lines of this piece it flowed really well through the piece you had some nice vocab in and out of the piece you should work on your imagery that's the only think you were lacking in this piece ohh and some your wording didn't flow as well as it did in some parts it just off by a lil bit

After all that Very nice piece

please return feed in Broken Halo

This was really nice as far as emotion goes...

But, I don't have to tell you it wasn't the most technical piece you've ever written.

No internals...end of sentence only type of shit...

But I guess you're getting shit off your chest so it's excusable.

Sorry you're in a tough time, man.

Don't worry, dude...by the time you're my age...you'll be yearning for a past that you, at your age, haven't even made it to yet...meaning the shit you miss now...you won't miss in 20 years...you'll miss a whole different era.

Time heals...as it fucks you over.

Peace

Thanks Born ^


and thanks for the replies everyone. ima close this now though. reply to some less-replied pieces.