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lol @ you being gay and not knowing it was a typo....fucking idiot.Quote:
Originally Posted by Black Prince
anyways Pak, dope peice, I enjoyed the read. You really are extremely smart for somebody your age, and your peices definitely show your level of intellect. The imagery was good in this peice, and I was feeling the storyline. This was well done, and I really enjoyed the read. Props.
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Yo Pak RTf on mine and Soulstice's collab please, I'd be extremely grateful
Huh *Horror* WTF...YOur name....it came from the dead...............lol...aight.
lol word, I got banned for insulting Vanja, oh well it's only for a week lol.
And thanks in advance.
good intro, you had some good emotion just in those 4 lines, great emotion throughout, very nice rhyme scheme, although you did break the pattern a few times, i like the idea of biographically writing a poem, its an original idea and you made it into a great OM, you had nice imagery and fairly good details about the events that occured throught mandela's life, i like the message behind the poem,
"Tommorow will be better, I wish for the better day"
i like how you used that as a theme throughout, and it was good how you closed it with the outcome of all his work, seemed kind of like at the end of a 'based on a true story' movie where they show pictures and tells you what the people ended up doing after the story, i thought that was a good idea also
overall this was a great piece of work, keep it up
very nice piece.. i liked the topic, good person you picked to write about.. the piece was nice and complex and flowed very smoothly.. overall it was a dope piece as usual.. and i agree with X_T on how you never usually change your structure that much.. it's always almost the same.. good shit.. stay up
Thanks.
Sorry it took me so long to get to this pak.I've been a busy guy.This was a very good piece and I have to say I learned some new things from it.I love reading pieces that teach me more or that I would never have known happened or existed.I though your descriptive writing was very good and you explained everything so well.Your rhyme scheme ran along smoothly.All in all this was a ver good piece and well worth the read.Not only did I enjoy the read,but I learned something from it.Good Job
-Dyl
No problem, life issues are more important than feed lol...Thanks.