Deadly Secret

thanks for the feed marv, you don't have to say no offence, I respect your opinion, and I'm not going to catch feelings because you didn't like it or w/e, that will just inspire me to write better next time. So thanks for the feed, it's appreciated.

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Originally Posted by Educated

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=307884
Collab I did with ta2 tears ^

Damn Witness! That was dope as fuck. I really enjoyed the latin in red or whatever the fuck language that is. It really made it a lot better. I enojyed the piece as a whole, but what really stood out to me was the way you worded shit, it made it flow really well. you seem to really have the concept of topicals down, but then I've only seen this piece from you. It was a very nice job and I enjoyed it. Keep at it dude....this was fuckin nice!

-Educated

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Im confused did you actually read the piece if you didnt realize that it was hebrew in red how did it make the writing better. It doesnt even look like latin...

I liked that you rhymed throughout the whole piece...
I think the Hebrew was a nice touch even though I cant understand it considering the guy in the story was jewish...
The flow of the piece was good and also the words you used are impressive for a 16 year old.

Witness...you hittin' up mine soon or what y0?

Great flow of internals and multis. Your structuring of the narrative kept me interested throughout, and was punctuated well by the Hebrew verses, making for a really spiritual tone. Great concept, perfect length, just a finely executed work. Keep up the skillful rhyming and imagery, man, it's awesome to read.

thanks dude, upping.

meh dope nuff drop...flow was on point...multies were there...couldnt really catch the topic...but this was fairly dope not ur best...but good nuff...meh pretty creaitve i must say...better than alot of the shit i read now in days...keep up.