yea, I'll check it out now
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yea, I'll check it out now
This was a DOPE piece. I loved the use of the rhyme scheme and stanzas because they kept a perfect pace and a perfect flow throughout this. The vocab was great, the imagery amazing, but mostly I loved the emotion. I was really touched by this piece because I've had a friend try to commit suicide, and I know what kind of a hole it rips in you. Suicide's been done before, but you had a very original approach to it, and it created a very beautiful piece. I hope to read the next thing you write. Will you return the favor on the first link in my sig please?
i thought this was sexy like the booty on j-lo son..lol j/k,the emotion was killer i loved it,the imagery was very vivid and painted a pretty nice picture inside my head while reading it, the vocabulary i felt was nicely done and on piont,nice structurealso,and i felt the picture was an excellent add it created more fun and emotion into the peice.
Witness im nominatin yo piece for the OM HoF
thanks,upping
don't sleep
Allllright, i got the PM. LET THE MANNNN HITTT ITTT.
Okay.. Umm, let me see how to do this.
The Potatoes & Gravy: I thought the "body" and / or central part of it was the most creative and was really easy to read, yet smothered, yes, smothered, in extreme depth and complexity, which obviously, is quite difficult to pull off. Seriously, FOR SERIOUS, i think this is by far the best thing you have written, like, sign it and mail it to me or something. But yes, anyway, moving on, the vocabulary, i would have to say was my favorite part, it flowed through the entire thing smoothly, it didnt grow choppy at parts, it just seemed constantly... unchoppy. Lrrofghfghdfh. You know what i mean, anyway, im pretty tired and i have West Nile. Ill most likely edit some more stuff in later when i can think straight. I had purple haze dude! =)!
lmfao thanks dude.
ok,i'm getting bored now
I liked the clash of two styles, with the poetic rhyme scheme, and then the classic multie version, the only down side to this is that it seems a quick transition, because the poetic version had such choppy flow, but the other part had a mutlisyllabic scheme and made it flow well... so remeber that.. The imagery was pretty good and it made well along with the topic take.. the emotion really brought out the best in the poetic verseion, and shined up the other part as well.. excuse me for saying version.. i meant part the entire time... your probobly knew that though'
hit up Pencil Sharpener