...getting slept on
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...getting slept on
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Finding souls to ensnare in that eternal lake of sulfur
Forced to hear the shrieks of woman as he sees the flames engulf her
nice intro...used very good imagery...
this piece was a decent read..not too bad...but your rhyme scheme got to be repetitive by the time i was finished reading it which made it very bland...you also could've used a lot more multies in this to make it flow better..you used very nice vocab and placed them perfectly where they need to be...im not too wowed with the concept because i've seen so many pieces like this....im not trying to be overcriticizing but im just being honest...take it how u want it...but overall this piece wasnt too bad but it wasnt too great either...