Thank you everyone. :)
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Thank you everyone. :)
yeah coo yo worked it well together. aod seemed to have a few toooo long lines. oversyllabled. which is easy to lose the flow on.. rhymes and emotion .wording and delivery was hoTT tho f'sho........structure was str8 part from a slight glich, 1 line.ha
text was used well.....vocab was illy..........keep raising the flow.
yeah pak had some illy mettas. nice sounds and visionary amages poppin the set up f'sho.dpused in poetic delivery........ flo was illy too in this ish ...........part from say a few more internal activity would carry such long lines some more and keep them alive .....
yeah coo writes f'shp
stay da fuk up
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Preciate it dog, thanks.
Uppin'
uppity sup
:) ^ What he said. :)
^What she said
Uppin'
Ver y nice piece here I have to say. One of the more better read's. Both had a nice flow through out which it seemed very focused on. I would'nt have expected nothing less either coming from both of you. Nice topic to go off with. Somewhat very creative. Nice way to stick to it also. Could have worked on imagery a slightly bit better but other than that I have to say this was nice overall. Nice meta's were also used here & alot of god use of vocab. Nicely done. But what seemed not to catch my interest was the font color. I don't really see a point in it. But other than that the read was nice.
-Infamouz.
Thanks preciate the comments, as for font colours, well they an added attraction lol
One more comment and then i'm letting this rest, so uppin'