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Rise :love:
word thanks for the feed. leave links people.
*Goes to hit it up*
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Son you already hit it up.Quote:
Originally Posted by Leximus
Lol I noticed that after looking at it.
this was an interesting and exciting topic you guys chose to write about... definately a good read for sure... so i'ma break it down simple for tha both of y'all
Nash- This piece was outstanding, none the less i've seen you do better, it just didnt seem like you put your all into this one like you usually do... the barse were more stretched than how u usually write but the flow did remain consistent... i dono if you were trying out a different style in writing on this piece? bcuz if u were, i'd have 2 say that i liked ur other style better fam... the vocab was still on point... you used very discriptive words that help create great imagry... the rhymes and multis were good, i saw lot's of complex rhymes being played and you just kept on running with them... i always love your unique rhymescheme aswell.. very metaphorical and interesting verse 2 read that's for sure... lots of emotion was also displayed in this one, and along with the story this verse turned out very nicely... good verse but i'd watch ur structure that's all...
Lex- Well i can say you elevated... that's for sure... prolly 1 o ur best i've seen yet, but u still have some work 2 do... for starters, your rhymes were very simplistic and juvenile, try and use more complex words to rhyme to help show off ur talent and leave ur audience in awe... the structure was pretty good, and the flow was nice, although at times i could sense it stumble, but for the most part it was really good... you stuck to the topic well and displayed nice story telling skills... the words you used were very discriptive and a good imagry was displayed... i saw attempts for emotion but all in all there wasnt very much of that... but youre trying and that's good to see... i loved some of the wordplay you used in there, for example when you asked the bullet how ur brother tasted or however that went... it was good and amazed me cuz i didnt think u were capable of that yet... well done and nice write, just try pushing your limits and really trying 2 use more complex rhymes...
good work i think the both of you worked well 2gether... hit the link Peaceful Storm in my sig and leave me some good feed.. thanks
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Thank you. I guess.
I guess? i thought that was good feed... ur not gonna get ne better than that
Lol...I got better feed from every one else...But its all good. Thankyou.
^fuck up and take the feed dude. lol, don't post after me, it clogs the shit.
thanks for feeding guys. exact i'll get to that a little later.
Cry just shut up and make my cd :love:
last time i give u feed then w/e... r u gonna hit the sig or wut?Quote:
Originally Posted by Leximus
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When I want to lol...Calm down.
well fuck i took out like 15-20 mins of my time and that shit's not even appreciated so fuck that shit