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Ok this was a very very good piece.I find it the 2nd best i have read from you.Everything you write is very original and is YOU all over.Your style of writing is so unique and I don't know where you find the time to think of all this with a busy life.Your creativity was amazing,and you were so descriptive whisch made it very easy for the reader to understand what you were talking about.You worded everything excellently and that reallly added to the piece.Your story telling abilty seems to always stay at one level and that is dope.You never drop below par and when clicking into all your pieces,I know I am in for a good read.Keep it going as I am certain you will.
-Dyl
oh my goodness. very nicely done. i'm really going to have to come back and read this later today when i'm more awake for better feed because it was meh on the concepts for me as it's 4:30 am and i havn't slept. from the looks of things though, the flow was nice as always, you've perfected that obviously, and from what i GOT out of it, the shit was just dope.
I'll come back and leave more descriptive feed later, looks nice from a tired mans perspective though dude, keep writing. love your work.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=300557
^Lex & me ..collabing, he's getting better. would DEF appreciate your feed.
i'll be back with an edit.
^Adding to my feed. hit that link as well!
brown by make I'm born to walk the forsaken grounds you take
shaken by timelines, fruits of timed lies fall ripe into pies baked
to feed your society's fat, overweight & those on the undertake
thunder makes a great clap, as explained by the bible thumpers
sort of a spiritual spear chucker, chuckling over an electric jolt
bolted in a flash of light from the heavens over an electoral vote
shoved down the secular throat
ok, so now that i'm awake, i can understand shit a little more. you've got MAD metaphorical shit in this. i love your comparisons, "bolted in a flash of light from the heavens over an elevtoral vote"
good read dude. loved that shit!
- Nash
This was dope, Bounce. I rarely see people attack current issues, and most of the times, the people that do, don't do a great job at it. You, on the other hand, shined. The photos also added another level of depth to it. Powerful images. Good job.
Thank you sir, I guess being part of that very demonstration helped me to vent here in this peice...
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this was a very nice peice, the imagery was top of the line, ur wordplay and multies helped the flow along jus aswell, this was by far the best peice i have ever read from u, it grasped the attention of the readers and had them kept in tune, u didnt fall off at any point to me, i liked ur structure and ur whole set up, the way u put it together was very nice, i cant wait 'til im good enuff for topics and shit like this, but good shit, keep it up, i'll be readin' more from you, overal rating 10.00013/10
hit up the o.m in my sig, i jus started them and need all the critisim i could get from dope heads, if u would that would be much appreciated, thnxp
thank you and I'll try to hit up your piece when I get a chance...
Dude this has got to be one of the best pieces i haver ead from you simply because of the fact that we have alot in common and i can relate to you and this piece first of let me start of by saying you pivked a great storyline and excecuted everything in your piece perfectly i especially liked the part of the pinata and blinded rage because mostly when i hit a pinata thats how i feel and although you didnt display much imagery the fact that the topic was based on what im facing not painted a picture in my head which is always good i loved this piece and i hope that you will keep writing pieces like this one i loved this i rate this a perfect ten great OM bounce
thanks for taking the time
this is why i love you, our like one of the few on a level i can relate with.. and a rhyme sheme.. i work with wich worked great in this piece.. i almost had a tear reading the second stanza, ;x this reflected the truth in such a way it would even wake the ones blinded with ignorance.. if they could grasp the message.
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Really nice work...topic bounced a little but fuck it the imagery and the metaphors and the overall message were superb...i especially like the start and end pieces and the first part about the president....all and all tho this shit was fire
thanks.
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