Upping this HOF piece lol j/k..or am i.
at work kinda bored
feedonme..and ill feedonyou
kinky shit.
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Upping this HOF piece lol j/k..or am i.
at work kinda bored
feedonme..and ill feedonyou
kinky shit.
Holy shit. This is a dope piece. The imagery was like a violent painting. Multis made the flow like water. I could read this again and again. HoF materital. Keep writing.
Thanx upping for some more feedback..
up.
Spekz are you a murderer man all your song about killing rape lol lmao
this is just pure skill. very nice vocab and the grusome was good cause it put a lil twist into it. keep droppin and ill be on the look
"next testing blunt objects that connect to necks paralyzing an escape
planning to rape? sizing your "date" tied in place and silent with duct tape''
Unethical horror to the torture in tormented living
w/more vivid growth of gore enhances demented killing
Chilling?
ax murdering maniacs attack back;presenting unusual cases
where blood graces killers with smiles creepin apon their faces
Veins emerge from the skin while they slowly strip human flesh
who put you to the test of survival; ending grim in a horrid mess
To Kill?
never processes the possessed minds seeking the stench of a carcass
who start this as an amatuer only believe next there no less of an artist
who paint grotesque "scenes" with blood
not a job..
a hobby doing deadly "deeds" for fun
^^
this was a nice opener.
you had a nice conept and the originality in this was great..yes the topic is played or used alot but you twisted it in your own ways and turned it up a noth with your metaphors and multies that were put together to create a creative stroyline and flow. this was done nicely and the image that you put in percpective was great and nicely done.
keep writing dude!.
RTF links in the sig
very good it sounded as if you really knew how to kill somebody ....lol i like the structure it was perfect very original to a point the flow was great the rhyme scheme was incredible as with the vocab the emotion was just right you should just keep dropping like that and you lll be named king for sure ;p
PEACE
would also like some seasoned feedback on this one
This was a nice piece of material. I like the sturcture of the battle and how everything was set up in your verses. Wordplay and all of your lines was dope never knew what line was gunna be next, keep up what your doing man, looking forward to reading some more stuff from you
^^thank You
holy shit.. this whole thing was ill.. my type of evil. have u tried spitting this to a beat?? my fav part was the "how to kill" portion.. if u listen to my audios i talk about killing, and morbid shit of that sort quite often.. keep droppin that murderous shit yo.1
oh n this is my first time in the text section so i dont know how this works but if u want u can peep my track.. has a lot of graphic shit in it about killing n what not..
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...-391499p3.html
Holy fuckin shit... (i would like to mention a few things)
First of all, the chances of me seeing this where like winning the lottery... i havent been in the OM forum in months, only reason i peeped it was to read the diss pieces by AI, so for me to come in here at the very time you up'd a piece of mine that is nearly 2 n half years old...blows my mind.
secondly, Thank you - and no ive never tried recording...not much of audio head myself....(although we prob. could work out something - if ud like to spit it) ...show me how its done lol....
3rdly.... since we are in scytzo together eventually ill be getting around to listening/reading e/bodies work...it is a goal of mine to get a lil mroe familiar with my fellow crew members... so stay on me [nohomo] about feedback and ill get to it...
right now...im not focused..
word, no prob.. i was on the scyts's forum in the thread where we posted all of our work.. and the title caught my eye.. dope shit man.. glad i peeped it. but yo no rush, peep my shit when u ready. yeah hopefully i can inspire u to spit that to a beat.. me, i dont spit no lyrics unless its mine.. i'd feel like dr.dre or something if i did,lol.. aight fam.Quote:
Originally Posted by Spekz.