Valentine's Day

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Originally Posted by ~SILENT~

Wow this was a ery interesting piece here. I see you have come a long way in your topical writting. I like your rhymescheme & your good use of vocab. The topic was also well choosen. You really stuck to the topic throughout the whole piece. Very good imagery was put into this piece also. That is what make's an OM, is it's imagery & keep's your OM interesting to read. This was a really good read through out the whole piece. This was well done. Kepp it up..

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Well the overall concept was decent. I like how you went with the mafia movie type story. It just seemed like you forced some stuff and used words because they rhymed and not because that was the correct word to use. It could have been worded different is all im saying. Over all it was decent.