Ok this was a good piece.You could of been a lot more creative on this topic.You could have gone differant places with it.Opener was good and some nice wordplay was put in.Some good metas in there also.I do not agree with anything Lil Romeo is saying because he does not have a clue.I liked your emotion in this also and I thought your structure woprked.It was sad the way the ld man died but it was intresting to read.Overall it was a good piece and I liked it,but you could have done a lot more to make it dope.
-Dyl
