the war begins

uppin.....more feed but plz don't put my lines were stretched because i already now...thanx
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this was an alright peice,you still have some elevating to do though...your structure wasn't very good in my eyes,you didn't have enough multi strings and it was far too short.but you have most of the basics down and I think that you will be a good writer if you keep elevating and reading drops from more experienced people than yourself.nice drop though for someone whom I think may be relatively new to writing OMs.keep dropping and elevating dude. read the tutorials.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=296067
^leave feed on that please

the son of the devil..is on a rapboard.

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wtf? your not at the whitehouse, declaring your supremacy and your reign of terror. Not devouring souls, not ripping apart hoes, bums, pedophiles, sex offenders, gays..
no demons, no earthquakes, no sign of anything evil? your jsut on a rapsite posting a verse? Is that your masterplan!!!! guaranteed to rule the world..one rapbaord at a time.??? wtf? gaaaaaaaaaay.

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um....as far as sheer subject matter... i kinda take offensive to it. But as far as skill, i say it rather decent. It has a steady flow. And i would say it's 2 short...but thats already been established

are my posts freakin visible now? dammit