aight uppin this shit come on dont sleep on dis
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aight uppin this shit come on dont sleep on dis
This was a nice piece both verses were good both hacd dope creativity. but i feel that the flow could have been better. structure on both parts were good could you leave feed on the link in my sig please
up this for more feed..Thanks for the feed that has been left, please hit this up some more tho
up..
I'm Looking for some one whos down to battle?
U set it up
And I'll Show U Wutz Up
this is not the place to look for a battle
up for more feed on our O.M.
Look$:
Your's was simple and short and to the point. a lil emotion shown and the words weren't complex at all and it felt like u didn't get in depth so truth be told i didn't enjoy yours and it was very easy to forget.
Ja Eazy:
Better than the first one, but had stretched lines and your last 2 lines didn't rhyme. u got a little more in depth tho but still it could have been way better. something i found extremely corny was how you are basically telling your mom "like tupac said, your appreciated"... like who says that to their mom?... is your mom even a tupac fan?... so yeah what im sayen is try not sayen "like tupac said" type shit, say what you feel in your own way, it's how u work on creativity.
U.S.P.:
You got in depth the most so ur emotion was felt the most in this piece. Best verse in the open mic but still lines were stretched and rhymes were too simple. This also could have been way better.
Overall you all gotta work on vocab and rhymeschemes. The presentation/structure was cool but felt stretched for ja and usp. look$ was the only one that flowed well but his context was the worse with the least emotion. So you all gotta find that balance and get more complex... like many of the phrases used in this piece were cliche, overused and shit... for the most part i got that dear mama vibe from it which really doesn't sound right unless it's pac. so u guys gotta be way more original.
Please return the favor to the link in my sig called "is it a sin to kill an insect?"... if all three of you feed-back on it then i'd be very thankful.
up..thanks for all the feed
keep it coming
u know...:pray:
up one more time
jus a little bit more feed please:)
....:)
this piece is just dope. and im sure we all can relate somethin of it. so just do ya thing and keep droppin.
Stop upping old pieces.CLOSED.