Lol this peice was fucking great. The flow was nice. the structre and the wordplay was fucking wonderfull. And the Plot was fucking incredible. But I don't get it....................7-10 piece.
Hit up my OM In return.
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Lol this peice was fucking great. The flow was nice. the structre and the wordplay was fucking wonderfull. And the Plot was fucking incredible. But I don't get it....................7-10 piece.
Hit up my OM In return.
thx for feed, rise..
any more?
This was pretty nice, your vocabulary was good, you stuck real well on the topic never went of course with it, the hol story line was nice, i liked how this was short an sweet, the imagery was nice, everything came clear as i had read it, keep it up man, and hit up any OM in my sig plz and thnx.
upping.
omg this was an excellent peice...pretty short but very ennjoyable to read..the topic was interesting and it caught my eye....structure was very nice and even..flow was nice throughly as well...and overall i really liked this peice..nice job......
piece was good didn't feel ur topic choice
but u did have great imagery to me vocab
was good and above what most heads are dropping
keep it up maybe we can collab later ?
As then agonizing screams are heard, echoing through the halls
Death is known around these parts, in bodies it crawls
Glimpses of sun are occasionally caught by a luck soul
But the more common bodies are trapped in this hole
Under a ship, they’ve been placed against their will
They’ve been emotionally battered, with tears their eyes begin to fill
^^^best lines
upping.