Lil Suzie

Pakaveli this was deep as fuck. i liked every part of it. the imagery in this piece was superb homey. deep shit.

Thanks, Preciate it ma dog

That was really deep the intro set the mood of the whole piece i really enjoyed it. The sentence structure was real good and great vocab. THe stroy had a lot of depth and made sense. Great good.

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yea this was a nice piece str8 up. i was feeling the vibe u was throwing and u had nice flow. exellent piece. keep up the good work

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uppin'

well,
beautiful structure, liked your emotion and your imagery was hot....
You have it down pat-
DOPE
~Grim

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Bang Bang i shot you up

sorta reminds me of The art of story telling-By Outkast.

Dope read.Really..The opening,the structure..the imagery...the whole 9.

nice.

I like the story..really intresting...

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Uppity up

Wow nice OM. This was one of your More deeper and thoughfull OM. Looks liek you made this a very good masterpeice. maybe even HOF worthy. First off I like how you started off the OM by making kind of a beggining poem in this. The imagery was amazing with some good scenes I can image. The emotion was well over the top. It was impressive. The end was a strong point I like how you ended. Maybe A suggestion though is the use of Bigger vocab to catch the reader more. SO overall a good peice.
Rating: 8.3/10

Yeah preciate ya comments, doubt this is HOF standard...but yeah uppin'