wanna collab?
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wanna collab?
Rise please.
good. not best i've seen lately but another good one, OM's been blowing up lately. gon' be hard for people to decide now. good shit. glad to see you're back at this. peace, check the love ish in my sig.
!Nash
Rise.
Rise.
This was nice, i liked the concept and u said pretty deep things. The piece was solid so it kept it at the same rate of skills instead of being wack here and there and not stable. Something you should work on is multies and vocab to make your rhymes more complex. Try rhymin longer phrases... u know like...
^that could be rhymed better and seem more deep if you said...Quote:
Save me from what you call love and what we call rape
Save me from the apple you poisoned and the poisioned grape
Save me from what you call love and the voice of rape
Save me from the apple you poisoned and the poisioned grape
^you see it's maken the end words rhyme more... voice of rape, poisened grape... so yeah just an example you know do you but yeah.
overall nice shit.
peace.
Thanks man. Can you maybe hit up A Vampires Will if you got the time?.
Save me from the fear that you'v caused and all else failed
Save me from the pain you've brung and time spent in jail
save me from the tears that you've dripped and blood spilt
Save me from the hate you've made and from all of your gilt
nice way to open this piece
this was a pretty good piece
ur flow was pretty tight for tha whole drop
u had some nice wordplay all thru it pretty much stayed on
u had really good creativey it was really good
ur strutre was perfect u made it really eazy to read
and ur topical was really good
keep it up i look forward to reading more from you
Go hit up A Vampires Will.