The incident and the man

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Originally Posted by Pakaveli

a couple more comments and i'll be happy

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Thas right

Okay:
I loved your flow in this, very constructive use of multis and made them fit in place very well, your structure was a perfect for this piece, in my opinion this is not one of your best pieces as the words seemed to not do justice to the mesage that was being given off, i mean the imagery was good, but for instance in our battle you came alot harder with the internals and message, i'm not one to pick on the fact that it was short, especially as i thought it worked to your advantage in this, i was actually still impressed by your talent, i think you just need to try to reach your full potential and keep growing as a writer, i think you have alot of talent man.

Well done.

Thanks, preciate it