If I Can't Cry Can I Borrow A Tear?

This was an educational trip i could say.... i liked the flowing description of each line and the way you put it, this isn't your best work as of late but still at a standard of your owhn. I liked the way this whole thingt was set out, made it look like an article from a newspaper at that particular time. The way you mixed fact with fiction was also inspiring. Overall, a very good and informative piece.

this is an excellent piece of work...the vocab was great, and the imagery was amazing....the concept was creative and original which is awesome.....it made me want to continue to read more...i like the fact that you had the first stanza, re-ccur again in the end, which was the cherry on top to what i think, is a master piece...keep writin :)

no fiction what so ever in this peice, everything was taken from actual eye witness accounts. I might have writen in some vivid descriptions, but nothing was taken out of context or made up. The baby and nipple part were first hand accounts and detailed in many articles.

Damn, this All REALLY happened, you can say i was ignorant to the fact

well in your defense it is a rather obscure atrocity one that I doubt to many outside of the area actually know about. I tend to research events like this, more so when I'm high as fuck. I'm glad you came in and read though, and yes this is not my best work, I save that stuff for mediums other than RB. It was just an SS HW battle verse. I don;t have tiem to write real involved for RB now days. Those are the actual bones of the victims in that pic up at the top.

Hmmm...WEll like i had said this HAS been an actual educational trip

Bounce, I left some feed on the bottom of page 1, so whenever you get the chance, may you please leave some feedback on my poem? Thanks.

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=286851

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Originally Posted by Ben N. Cyder

Wow, this is amazing. The picture was so eerie and spooky, I liked the 'horror' theme that you incorporated into the piece. In my eyes, you're the most consistent poet here on the board, and I wish you the best out in the real world. The title for this was very original, I dont know if this was a topic from SS, but you approached it well, in an unique direction. The path that the drop followed was obliterating, and hopefully people will understand what you are portraying here. A lot of new heads are not coherent enough to form a logical intellect and actually take the time to understand what you're sending out. You're a great writer, a great person, stay that way. Please hit the link below.

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=286851

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How did I miss that?

Anyways thanks for the kind words sir, it's very much appreciated. Yes, this was last weeks SS HW battle against Brix. It got verse of the week in the SS mag. Again thanks and I will peep your stuff in a bit.

IIght bounce... When u get up

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...4&page=1&pp=15

Hit the OM :coolio:

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wowowow the imagery here blew my mind... i thought it was savage in a good way... you ripped at this in a topic thats been used... war... but how it was specific made it really original.... really great work. not as much poetry style like alot of the members here... but more using the elements of language to tell a great story... which seems to be the approach when it comes down to the dopest heads... i like to read your stuff i learn a little something everytime i do... and also like to see the contrast with my style and how really unique we are all as writers... great work.

Thanks for the read man, it's appreicated.

I know the overall topic has been used but I doubt anyone knew this really happened prior to this drop. It's an obscure event in history. I tend to write about these kinds fo things a lot.