that was tight man... some parts were a lil choppy but deep. liked.
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that was tight man... some parts were a lil choppy but deep. liked.
thanx for the feedback
this was okay...imagery was ight...flow was a bit inconsistent and you lost me a few times...i felt it was too short...to me part of the story was missin...but i'll read up on this cause i never really paid attention to this incident...
stay up though
i feel like this concept of tellin stories about black struggles is gettin old. but with this piece u changed mah whole opinion. now i see that what white people did to blacks is wrong. good imagery good punchlines. flow was a little off but overall ima say this should be a nominee for piece of the month.
ok....this was very well written,I have never seen any of your work before and I have to say that it was a pleasent surprise, there was very good imagery in this peice and the structure was fine (although it could be improved), your flow was quite good, and I was feeling the topic you went with, the name you came up with for this OM was excellent,it is what made me come in here in the first place.....as I said this is the first OM that I have ever read from you, and it was very good, your vocab was complex but not too complex, it was very readable, and I think you should sign up for SS if you have not already done so....nice peice,keep dropping.
leave feed on this please.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=285358
thanx for the insight on my OM cuz...as well to all the others...be on the look out for my new one that is hopefully gonna get dropped by the end of the weekQuote:
Originally Posted by The Witness.
word I'll be waiting for it.......do me a favour and leave feed in that link I posted.
ight i'm on it right nowQuote:
Originally Posted by The Witness.
That was tight how u became emmet till to write the poem, that was real deep, like it a lot
thanx for the feed shawtyQuote:
Originally Posted by Temp Gurl
LMFAO @ What!! a white gurl.....
Deep peice great GREAT imagery...story form rhyme with very good vocab...Structure had me stumped for awhile until i got it...Very good peice sorry so short but i feel that sums it up
EXCELLENT peice
thanx for the feed
this was good... vocab structure flow.... everything was str8 very enjoyable read... was really feelin this...
sum deep shit here kid everything was on....structure flow vocab... everything was crazy nice shit,..... keep it up
thanx for the feedback yall