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Verb:
I enjoyed it, the rhymescheme was pretty ill and i could see it flowing nicely on a beat. You had complex rhyming and gave the topic a deep meaning.
Tekz:
I liked this one too, but the rhymescheme didn't impress me and some rhymes seem simple. i couldn't find much of a deep meaning to this, but it kept me interested anyways.
v/ Verbal Insanity... just a stronger piece in all aspects... both did well tho, no verse came overall wack.
verbal, you killed this dude...
verbal-
your imagery was on point like whoa. You had a cool, complex rhyme scheme that really helped flow and intelligence. The best oart though is the imagery. You came at a different angle and you imagery fit it well. You painted a picture. GREAT DROP... this is why your iin TNL and AM.
Tekz-
you cam okay. Your rhyme scheme was simple and with this, there isnt a huge amount of intelligence in the piece which of course makes it boring and bland. you came with okay imagery, but nothing that was really great. overall, okay verse...
v/ verbal
name it, he got it
The senseless sense of winter cascades my salt filled wounds…
As the smell of death lingers, the flowers they cease to bloom…
Perilous in a hazy shade of December, deep in freeze I bleed…
As detriment enters my body, I fall deep into an eternal sleep…
A picture painted, abstract on a canvas of mind, celestial to pain of rain…
From my eyes, the skies, disguise animosity thunderous clouds rise maimed…
Yet among the paramount thoughts, the thought crosses my mind, I’m insane…
Unnamed, except for the branded chains, living on the streets the cold it pains…
fosho i was feelin this..imagery was graphic .....str8 hard hitting..flow was long but on point.........nice use of vocab for the most part...........yeah coo
vs
In this world of cold and darkness, dear summer I await u
For winter shows no mercy let alone that it hates u
Reluctunt to relieve myself from my homes quilting warmth
Dangerous plagues hit and kill innocents like a winter storm
Perilous threats forbid us from the outer life, from most light
If we should leave our hut we’d come back wit more then frostbite
yeah i thought those partsd was nice..i could easily flow with it..as for the rest of your verse i thought was worded a bit off..and rhymes stayed a bit too basic all the way..also a lot cudda been worded a bit better....plus in all tho the piece was short it got a bit repetitive alreadyu...seemed to keep saying..summer...winter...every few lines...instead of sayn developing into a other concepts or imaginings...had sum good poetics to it still
vote-verbal...
for a more graphic verse of imagery...and wording the verse more presise....and nice
Verbal Insanity. wind 1-0
TeKz loses 0-1