The Day With No Rules

This was an interesting topic. It got me to thinking. You're rhyming scheme seemed a little rushed, though (A few moments later their were little kids playing with matches......
Then I black out and imediately have sum future flashes...............). You're vocab was ok, but not the best. Your flow was nice, though. Intersting read. 6/10.

thanks guys.....uppin

this piece seemed a bit played sorta reminded me oof Nas- If I ruled the world sorta song.

overall wordplay was descent but ya could use a lil more complexitity with ya rhymes as well, flow was consistant and ya strucutre was pretty forward as well, the topic itself was like i said before I bit played but ya had some creativity n ya thoughts of mind with thtis piece, descent use of direction with the piece as well

ya did have some hard lines though which i just couldnt imagion liking... no hate but thi is how you work on things n shyt

overall a descent piece for a quicky

holla

thanks man..uppin for more

uppin for feed yo