Without you...

forgot the metas......nice stuff

Word me too...

Look although i respect the opinion that it was played, i also think that you wrote it exactly how you felt, the emotion was good and it was evident that you have been through the topic you were writting about... The flow was excellant, it really stood out in the peice, and it's rare that i reada peice that has that kind of flow with-in.
The good thing about it was that you were telling the tale of millions of peoples heart break experiences... I thought you could have gone more in depth about the way you were feeling, but to me that didn't put the peice down atall i really enjoyed the read and yes it reached to me.

Your choice in wording was good, and the switch from the love theme into the anger theme really rubbed off well for you, The emotion once again was there, maybe you could have gone deeper into it again, but still it didn't put your peice down atall.

To me this was a great read and so true to many... I'd urge you to keep writting and keep dropping things like this, just try different styles and i'm sure in no time atall you'll be in OMhof.

Hit this up please...

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=279644

Thanks alot for the feed both of you. And Verbal, thankyou for finally getting the idea. Not only is this MY life expierence, but its many others, so many people have had their heart broke to the point of no return on your retaliation.

Thankyou once again for getting the deeper concept.

"Theres no one who can touch me.. No one who can love me..
No one I can hold tight.. Besides you when were snuggling..
THAT WAS TIGHT

this was a really good om u used tha topic well

it flowed really nice and i felt this it was deep

Thankyou alot man.