not bad man, good rhyme scheme and flow,above average vocabulary,the imagery was decent not great,emotion was decent also,,,the work you do isnt bad at all man keep writing ill be around to peep.
Printable View
not bad man, good rhyme scheme and flow,above average vocabulary,the imagery was decent not great,emotion was decent also,,,the work you do isnt bad at all man keep writing ill be around to peep.
thanks
possibly final ups.
Ben, even though I like your work, I still have to warn you. No more upping this. Post your link with your feedback. No more than 3-5 ups per piece.
-Brix
wow nice visuals.. worded on point fosho
flows tite...nice vocabs...dope poetics going on in this joint.. i'd prefer to have seen it in at least 2 stanzas/verses.. coz it has a bit of length to it.. no biggy still..
all in all t'was pretty sic writing.. with lenty of emotion poured in...
stay1
click this-
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=278986
pz