yeah this was pretty nice.. the story could of been fused a lil better i reckon.. for some of the emotion and reflections became a bit seperated
like u mentioned the death of a brother in 1 line.. then move on to something else.. then come back to it later.. instead of say breaking that recollection down within the same bars,, had some good obscenities..which gives it entertainment in my eyes fosho
maybe a couple of visuals or graphic mettas wud be mo good
pz
flowed well.. kept consistant..
good works
