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That's because it's really a poem that's posted in the PS forum... Mind quickly converted it and fixed up the rhyming alittle so that it could be seen here aswell because this forum is more active than the Poetic Scriptures forum. But thanks alot for all the love and responce.Quote:
Originally Posted by Jay Says...
^word, up.
this was a wild song. it kinda had a ghostface vibe to it. very original say the least. i read it was a poem and it had to be becuz the flow was choppy, but n e way the thought process was dope and i fox with it.
describin in one word- D O P E
even if it was too long i enjoyed readin it..guys rly dope definetly for HOF.
keep up guys ;)
Damn This piece was hot it had a stronge message that some people will not get(Those People Are Probably the Ones Who Would Come In Here And Say It Was Iight) But This Was more Then IIght bounce is right this should be in legendary peice cuz alot of peopel do try to do something lot this and not achived but from what i read you guys did......Stay Dope
thanks fellas
Mindless:
All of your stanzas were magnificent. I can imagine how much work was put into this but you made my jaw drop with your emotion. The content of this composition was absolutely mind boggling dude, seriously. The imagery was so elaborate and precise that I felt like I was watching a medieval times hit movie. All I can say is wow, and you'll be seeing this baby in legends. Great job. 10/10.Quote:
We came engraved on stumps from the cherry
tree that was chopped down, which became our
coffin as drops of resin incased our tasteless eye.
A golden apple stolen from the hands holding time.
Washington watched them enter the garden
and pick fictional leaves from the money tree,
bringing dead presidents crumbling to their knees.
So sit at the head of my table and tell me
of the minorities who's basket came back empty.
Then reach for the blood sun with the rope between
the dirty leaves where poverty once hung.
Atticus:
Atty atty atty, you are elevating by the piece you drop. Every line you write just keeps getting better and better, and I run out of things to say for you bro. I enjoyed this a little too much lol. This is because your vocabulary is so easily intricate but yet so understandable. You also had heavy amounts of emotional lines that made me think a bit.Quote:
Hear the dogs bleed, their hungering screams
into the dense air as Jesus yanks the collar
so hard that a spark is born in dry atmosphere,
While the darkness Watches from between
gaps in the forrest's fingers before the flame
dances up the arms of a quivering evergreen.
The two thick trunks burn steady until all their
limbs have been singed off and all that remains
is a charred may pole as Jesus starts dancing,
Hand in hand with ignorance, before the polls falter;
land crossed on ground as embers light their pride.
All these new constellations fall beside
the rippling skies while Jesus opens his eyes;
falls upon God's lost cross, into his transfixed
crucifixion and begins to sing sin as he cries.
Overall:
Both of you are outstanding. You guys are experienced writers, poets, people. I cant do anything more other than tipping my hat to you two. You've done an amazing job, and I dont think anyone can top this piece yet. This is getting a 'yes' from me into legends. I love this piece.