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well to my opinion this was alright couldve been better what i didnt like about it was teh flow and the rhymin skeme the rhymes was weak you didnt rhyme none of your barz at all tahts what made this sound fucked up and you need to bring more strength to your topic
thats the most ridiculous thing i have ever heard. nothing rhymed? EVERYTHING RHYMED YOU DUMB FUCK! Goddamn...i figured there might be some cats that know what the fuck is going on on this site since there is 40,000 members. I guess not. You guys wouldnt know a hot rap if it climbed up your asshole.
yo this drop was good...it had a good smooth flow
struuctre wass nice and veen..rhymes were also good
topic wasd alright..not that creative but still good
keep at it man...peace-
thank god.
still uppin for feed on this if peeps are willin to give it. thanks. one.
aiight...dis piece was def a "work of art" !!!
I liked da imagery u built in my mind--it was ez 2 follow but @ da same time da structure was kinda hard 2 keep track of--i kno, i kno...i'm gettin 2 how i think u could mprove it! LOL
if ur gonna capitalize ur multi's then u should set da piece up differently then how u did...
maybe try spacin ur lines out every 4 or so...this'll help when ur reader is trying 2 follow ur flo & it'll also look more ORGANIZED
Some people don't mind unorganized text, but 4 da most part--if u's gonna post & u want HONEST feed, make it ez on ur reader
i def liked da multi's dat u used...maybe try some INTERNAL rhymin thru out tho, i think that would also help 2 keep ur reader's mind right
it will keep ur lines mo concise or maybe FOCUSED is da right word--& u'll b able 2 then elevate on which words u choose 4 ur piece!
~~i agree on ur comment bout peeps feed on drops on dis site tho...dey's LAZY! LOL
But some of us r really lookin 4 tyte drops tho--i do my best on helpin people wit my feed cuz even tho i'm fairly new 2 da site, i been writin/rhymin since i was lil...~~
keep droppin cuz on da real, dis was hot! ~1~
-LL
Thank you I appreciate it. That was the first piece of honest feedback I have seen in a minute. Not only did you tell me what you liked about the piece...but you gave genuine insight on how to fix it. Once again....thank you much.
this wasnt too bad for a noweight...
it was average in all cartegories...but nothin really grabbed my attention...keep workin at it tho...
I think what gets me is that I am not a noweight. Maybe new to this site but I have been rapping and writing for 6 years now. I have a CD coming out in august. I really wonder how many people actually read this shit.
all I can say is shit your flows incredible shits hard -- now I aint bout to jump on ya dick now but uhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh I can't hate you flow was shit dog just keep it up ya know keep doing ya thing but I loved ya akward yet uniform flow ya know -- I liked the energy in in like you put power in words but ya flow hot and if it's hot on here than I know its hot face to face and in the streets ya know uh huh
word...thanks for the love dog. I really just dont understand if cats aint feelin this piece then tell me why...just dont come up here tellin me shit sucks cuz I know it aint true! still uppin...one.
No Problem...Deffo keep droppinQuote:
Originally Posted by eyeQ
I'ma b lookin 4 mo from u!!
& lemme kno when dat CD drops (amalia530@yahoo.com)...over here on da west coast i'm not 2 sure when most ish drops! LOL
-LL
word...definitely will keep peeps posted.
well I tried to check you out ya know but you aint got no new posts so imma bless other niggas so they can read this ya know cuz the shit was hot no doubt and if a nigga aint feeling this shit then fuck him I swear
the topic was common..... but well written
also the flow was off at some point, but you had some good imagry..., i also felt the structure, cause it was clear to read. you had some str8 multies add with a lil vocab.
good piece.....7.6/10