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beautiful man. straight ill. this feed will seem short. but its because everything was perfect. the imagery was set straight and the description helped with that. the flow was tight. the use of punctuation was dope. overall this was some of the best work ive seen in a while. the only thing that seemed a little off was the timing of the plot. you kinda went to Hitler in europe, then off to the twin towers, then back to 1865. dont get me wrong the description of each was dope. nice drop minor elevation in that one area to complete this legendary piece b.
-Peace.
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T-H-A-N-K ..you for putting effort into replying
**juss 2 note, by him saying my time line of the piece was fuckd up, he actually made me catch an error i had a duplicated line (twin towers line..at the end of the middle part), pasted inbetween lines about hitler, and slavery...so the time line of the piece isnt fuckd its in good order so disregard that**
THANX ISIS..FOR SAYIN SOMETHING BOUT THAT!
nice
holla
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This was my first very close stab at a H.O.F run, so if you thinkin its dope maybe u should drop by that thread lmao!....however u just think its close dont worry SPEKS is putting forth effort hehe!
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uppin
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check my om --------------bra------------plz----------thnk you-----------now
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Wow..I was really feeling this, I actually read it twice...Your structure was great,Vocab was outstanding,Rhyme scheme was very, very impressive..I love this piece,I was really feeling the ending...
^^^like Vo:kab said
i don't even kno what else 2 say
i agree dat u use alot more in ur lines--u drag em out but ur right in that it def adds 2 ur style--got me?
def keep dropn cuz i wanna c more from u--1
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Thank you for the drop back even tho ur own words were minimal..i totally got what u were saying thanx lady.........
.....Also would like to thank Vokab for nominated this drop.....
Very greatful for an honor like that...good feelin lookin at nominations then see'n ur piece
so vokab if u in here again and see this THANX!
KEEP THE FEEDBACK..COMIN!
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Sssssslllllleeeeeeeeeeeppppppppeeeeerrrrrrssssss
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this piece really showcased your range of creativity....you used a nice concept that i have never really seen done before...multies galore..this piece was spilling with ill internals...from what i can see you are a pretty experienced writer in terms of ideas and concepts..vocab was alright but could've been upped just a lil..lol...while i was reading this piece i kind of got the feeling that you were rushing it quite a bit while you were typing it...it might just be me..but anyways this is definitely one of the better pieces i have read today....good work..
i would highly appreciate if you would drop feed on my most recent OM called "Evening Tea"....getting mad slept on yo
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=271503
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Word ill definetly hit that up!
thank for the feed ...always appreciated
Uppping!
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One of the last ups im gonna give this piece...so hopefully a lot more feedback comes in, maybe be a nomination or 2 lol.....word!
Upping
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Hates new pieces lmao.....pushes this shit down sadly!
well last up for lil bit....
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Thanks for leaving feed in my OM, speks.
This was Ill to the definition. Seriously deep, like a fuckin shot from Dick Chaney. This feed will seem so short, but its only because I saw no flaws. I loved the second section the most, but all of it was close to perfect. The flow was crazy. Wordplay was out of this world. Vocabulary was out of my mind (Didnt know alot of those words). This peice should be more than just a good verse... Im thinking OMHOF.. Dopeness defined. Keep dropin hotter than snoop. And I can gaurintee you'll get in the OMHOF.
You got my vote with this... If I could Rate this it would be a 10/10... Perfect... Loved the multies.
Thanks, Dont forget to check out my OM's....
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Greatly appreciate that wonderful feedback dropd.. wasnt super long but it ment tons 2 me so thats all good...(hopes u take that 10/10 rating, right to nominations lol)...lol its all good THANK YOU THO
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crazy nice peace son, damn im taken all ur advice in my topical lol.lets start off with ur topic. I think the idea of the villians bein smart and over power civlians was deep. and its a hard topic 2 explain and get into deep and have examples but i think u did it perfectly. U used hitler as a perfect example beacause he was a genious whether people want 2 debate or not. ur topic had me going and i wanted 2 read all of it when i read the first few lines.. nice opener. Im only 14 so i coulndt uderstand all of it 2 tell u the truth because my mind dosent run that deep yet but dope. U have stretch lines like me and i like that u get all that u want 2 say out. and it dosent interfere wit ur flow or struc u perfectsise ur lines. Ur stuc by the way was great 2 with the 3 parts great idea. Finally ur flow was mad crazy nice. the immense vocab put a feel 2 it like no other and that really brings out ur feel for the flow. Ur rymes were perfect. u left ns feed on mine so i hit u back pc
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Knowing that u think i can help, or my advice is well takin is better than any feedback no doubt! shows that ive grown as a writer, and that means more than any hof nomination or nething so thats deep e.z...THANKYOU
