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dope shit indeed...nice rhymes and flow..
The content was rather good..props..
Thanks but I'd try leavin more feed so you don't get on the warning list and then banned...Try it...No hate just lookin out...
props on the piece homie. I likes how you were rhymin within the lines as well as at the end. That's important cause it showcases skill and keeps attention of reader. On that note, You really should'nt worry too much about line length. Reason being is if you rhyme internally, like you do, random size lines will for the most part play themselves out.
Meh.. Dont like the topic, but overall, it was a pretty nice drop. The thing I didnt like was that it was kind of choppy, not the flow, but I couldnt tell what you were trying to get to the reader. Dope flow, ok creativity, nice wordplay, overall this was good.. But as usual, there is always room for elevation. If this could be rated, it would be a 7.5/10.. Keep dropin.
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you blew me away wit this one...i especially liked those multis in the first stanza.
strong finish as well...you summed up all of your lines with well concieved structure..
nice
i give this a 9.5-not much room for improvement
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damn nigga thats sum good powerful stuff its about time someone did a verse or two like that keep it up 1
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it was good i didnt expect it to turn into a race thing but it was good your lines were a bit streached but it was a good peice
i liked your structure 8/10
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They crossed the border without the needed information...
Simply stuck in the situation by their illegal immigration...
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ur internal structure was good--how u rhymed within the lines...
i liked the topic cuz u put ur own style in2 it which is wat dis is all about
props on dis drop, but i think u can def elevate by choosing another topic dat's controversial like dis 1...not 2 many people can pull dis kinda piece off, but u did it nicely.
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