..When the Ink dries.. N LitEnd & Phayme

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Originally Posted by n litend

..i want you to be able to feel my words, feel my passion, my emotion the sentences strung together, that plays a sweet melody of devotion the flow of motion, like liquid, my hand glides across the sleek page with discrete rage, another line is created to show feeling on these days

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Wow... at how sick these lines were .. rest were nice but wow@these.
Your flow was sick throughout, you had a nice selection of unforced multies which put a nice edge to this verse.Also you had good emotion in there.which is important and you pulled it off well.

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The pen hits paper, My blood reaches its destination The divine creation, Drying the ink in nothing more than a temptation

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These opening lines were the best in my opinion.nice flow and a good selection of words .. i dont think you were as good as N Litend but still pretty good i feel your piece lacked emotion and didnt meet the standards N was giving . Yet dont get me wrong this was all good.

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Theres nothing much i can say which has not already been said, the structure was good, vocab excellent, storyline good and presentation good, this is the kind of standard that should be set for all OM's, keep it up both of ya

Can ya check ma OM, thanks
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=271537

Thanks for the replies, appreciated.

I'll get on ya open mic now.

N LitEnd?

no shit... lmao

anyhow... good shit ya'll... actually wrote about something... OM is missing substance something fierce...

critique? umm... maybe work on some alternate rhyme schemes... switch it up some... but thats about it

everything else was solid fellas

Thanks, much appreciated.

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for when when my ink dries, truth is told, not lies, I justify
there’s no boundaries, no edges, no walls, nothing to stop me, i just defy
this is how I feel when I write, I take flight, soaring high, time is tamed
how I feel when verse is done, ink is dry? Them moments, my life is changed

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nice, i was feelin that. creative .


nice topic, lookin forward to see'n more drops sonny .

im feelin it alot its like wen u write ya get a natural high off writin down shit that flows thru u if u get wot im sayen safe im feelin dis pice alot man..

nice job. this one sounded a whole lot like an actual song. prolly make for a great audio key if you ask me. flow was nice, and its cool how you can bring imagery into a piece that doesn't seem like a story is what its made for, ya kno. all around, good read man, keep writin'.

peACE

Thanks for all the replies.

Yup

Y`all liking that wordplay?
eh
eh?

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