Sex With Kashia

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ha....i actually thought that was it...im nice..that was hott , i like the concept..it was original..but u made me fall off cuz u forgot to cap a "Z"

"itZ crazy though, she had warped into a total sex addict
at that moment she had even asked for it in the addic" <--- and learn how to spell attic

lol 8/10...

lmao i aint even notice that....and fuck you i was high...and i dropped out i cant spell hoe lol...up

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yo i can come up some cool shit for part 2 if you wanna let me in on it too if so hit me up in pm

lyrically its pretty shit, the flow is nice and the story telling side of things is good, i can follow your flow, but with regards to rhyming structure and vocab its pretty basic.. the Z idea with the text is nice, but this wouldnt be noticed if it was audio.
there was a few funny lines in there, and some deep ones, so its nice to keep a mixture. i got a little bored of the story towards the end, but hey, thats just my english oppinion..

6/10

word^^^^but thats why it would never be an audio....duhhhhh

Good job, man, I was impressed with the imagery and the whole hidden Z thing, lol, I was onto it though :coolio: Decent vocab and as a twist, it was played, but I've not seen it like this so well done :), an imagination is strong and evident in this one, nice work pard'ner!.

PLEASE check out Letter To Heather in my sig, sleeeeepepeped on :(.

Oh, and you can extend the Z's to make it in an audio lol, :rolleyes:

i liked it... i think the Z thing is remotly witty but I actually caught before the hint. Good deal though. Imagery was good, rhyme scheme was on point, structure was flawless. Not a bad verse. Ive seen better out of you but it was good. Its harding writing on sex and you did it well. Sweet.
HIT MINE UP BITCH

LOL this is a funney peice
NIce concept and some nice rythmes
Vocab and wordplay waz rite and so waz struture
Wanna see more work from u
Nice drop

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