also please hit this up with feed thanks
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=262768
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also please hit this up with feed thanks
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=262768
aiight good topic, hatas bring me down 2 lol, flow wuz pretty dope throughout, lyrics wuz pretty good, coulda been stronger, word choice wuz appropriate 4 wut wuz bein said, wordplay wuz decent, structure worked well2 me, both did a pretty good job in my opinion
yea def a one that would be better on audio.. good flow and structure still.. the story got a bit rpetitive in word use tho.. wordplay was ok here and there... had some good character in the verse.. could of had a bit more originality in the delivery and wordplay to give it a lift.. still yo worked well together on this....rhymes cudda been mo complex in places....
but yeah stay up
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For the love and pete and all things shiny, learn how to type in plain english. This piece made my eyes hurt to read. This is text, not audio. The topic was played and the vocab you both used was basic. Pick an original topic and aim for stronger vocab on your next piece. Snypah had some nice multi's, but thats about it.
Keep elavating.
fanx tum, shawty, vortex & johnny... feedbak appriciated yall...
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uppin dis................
yo ma did you forget again? you need to lay off the green for like a day so you concentrate on shit. not bein rude but when you gonna get the song done? peace out an one love ma. ya boy big-j
i think that shit was off the fuckin hook yall you know what there hardly any good female emcees out there so hold it down for the women yall that shit would be bangin with a sick piano beat with a heavy kick
feelin dat .Quote:
came from the slums, roaches and rats
my nigga goin the wrong route, forever i got his back
got plans of blowin up like Michael Jack
lol, aint they .Quote:
2 much hatin, imitatin, muthafukaz becomin irritatin,,,
Overall this shit was ok, the hook was straight trash though .
Snypah's wordplay ok fuh a female, Lady dip was nice to.
keep it up ladies .
thanks yall