blah, your regular mediocre depressed verse.
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blah, your regular mediocre depressed verse.
umm thanx? yeah w/e uppin feed
uppin feed peeps, dun sleep on dis thread please
thnx 4 all feed so far lets get a bit more though
that was really nice, keep up the good work
thanx for tha feed Drako, let's get a few more replies tho
ok this was a nice piece here. fiyah u are gettin betta n betta the more i read ya shit. the wordplay vocab so nice, flow aiight. mista ya verse was nice too. jus get rid of the periods before ya lines shorty. stay up yall.
yeah my flow wuzn't tha best on dis piece, but I wuz goin more 4 content dis time lol, neways appreciate feed, uppin piece
hey yall i think this was pretty dope grim i know u could do better but i liked the story u told------
dopoe
pz
thnx 4 feed and lil marky i like ya siggg----thizz in peace MAC DRIZZLE
thanx 4 tha feed marky, uppin still
uppin feed, can we please get a few more replies?
yeah dood ish yo... more poetic rythm than rap flow... i'm actually trying to seperate my poetry form my raps as much i can at the moment.. whilst keeping the metaphorical aspects...not sure if i liked all of the rhyme scheme in this one.. it worked weell i guess .. i was just put off a tad by certain end rhymes.. namely the tio sion ending words... mainly in the first verse....
i diddnt like the end line much either...
but still all in all a dope piece fosho...
rtf
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=263288
thanx vortex, I'll hit up tha link asap, jus not tonite
verse 1,
nice flow, gd use of vocab, and you really layed the basis down for a good piiece
i liked your verse
verse 2,
was good aswell, aybe some work on vocab and some of the flow
but apart from that a very decent piece
keep doin ur thing