were did murder nine go? i wannna talk to the dude.
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were did murder nine go? i wannna talk to the dude.
we dont kno but leave feed if you still in here
it was great.
you freestle, i mean like disses and stuff?
This was an interesting piece. Very emotional as well. Scheme was a bit edgy but that doesnt matter in a piece such as this. I'm sorry for your loss, but dont let it get you down mami. Everything will be iight.
You dont have to, but if you wouldnt mind could u return the favor on my piece Lawless Streets? Keep up your hotness.
-Withersman
wow u one twiztid individual.... u schooled this topic tho.. I guess nice job
Ok, im confused? The topic stood out yeah, but I didnt think it was sick and twisted, nor deep and poetic... It was something that would grab attention, you could of handled it better imo, but a nice job. Now I'm confused... You killed you daughter, the nurse came in and didnt do anything, and you went to her funeral? Nothing happened to you? I accept that this isn't real (I hope) but you gotta think about that type of stuff, or did I just read it wrong? You have to appreciate whoever is gonna read the piece while you're writing it, the worst thing you can do is confuse somebody because it denies you the fact of them reading anything else you write, which destroys you in the long run.
thanx for all your feedback....withersman....how'd you kno about my loss?? you got an alias or sumthin?? issue....no the story is not true and yes i will make other parts to the story so yall wont be confused but at the time i wrote this...that was all that came to me...sorry for confusing you though....and yes cruel206 i do freestyle and battle.....holla!!!
yo
it was pretty straight but also weird at the same time
over all thu decent drop
thank you ups
strait drop good topic theres just sumtin bout it but wat i dnt kno but otha than that its pretty dope
iight ups!!!
uppin yall
woooo, dis is shit hot buddy. fucking ace. 1
yeah good ish fosho... maybe the flow transmission from line to line could be elaborated on and improved... but still nice piece.. i felt your language and expression coming thru... structure was cool part from that 1 stretched line in which perhaps a word or even 2 cud be deleted
ie
her throat was clogged with hazordous chemicals and air passage couldnt get through
becomes
her throat clogged with hazordous chemicals & air passage couldnt get thru
would neaten it up some..
great creativity from you
keep up
pz