First Love.

Rofl, Im not "bitching," about it, I was just making a simple statement.

Thanks for the feed, I'll rtf on some of your shit.

And no, no alais, like I stated in the tryout thread for Po'Ethics, my friend got my on this site, I usually just write by myself at home.

Also, all my shit is for real, so yes, I have expierienced this, thats why it had the imagiry, because its from my emotions.

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This piece is very deep and emotional which makes it very pleasant to read. The structure was on point all the way through.

I honestly have to say, the deepness of this piece made it very good. I have been through this situation before so I can see where your coming from on all aspects.

One thing i would change (i'm victim of this too), it seems some lines you forced the rhyme and that would throw off the line in a sense. But, for most part the lines were good!

That about sums it up from me. Good piece and be on the lookout in Poetry for one of my new pieces tonight.

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Thanks for the feed.

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its is good its a good piece of work and so tru...........9/10

Why the lousey feed from kids now? I leave 3 paragraphs on your shit, and people reply with 1-2 lines. Oh well.

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get used to it -=)...people are selfish..haha

Yeah, Ive noticed lately.

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Nice flow, imagery and shit, liked the feel ta put in it.....Keep it Poppin'

Thanks alot guys.

overall this was tight..i was feelin the topic and the rhymes were tight
flow was smooth and the creatvity and complexity to this was here and it was good
vocab was good pretty complex and the imagery was good when the aprts were good to have it..overall this was tight..keep it up..peace-

Thanks alot.