~The Last Day~

i wasnt feelin this piece it was stretched
out and the word play was a lil too simple
the story was good but the rap was simple
work on multi's and vocab
5/10

This drop was deep. Good topic-the first line caught my interest and you held it through the piece. next time you might wanna use a bigger font though, kinda detracts from the rhyme havin to squint. Good imagery, i could almost see what you were describing. 8/10

oght thanks everyone and champ#1faggotofRB your just pissed cause i said you need to elevate.....

You need 2 links to 2 open mics you've left decent feedback on or this will be closed. Read the thread at the top of the forum if you don't know how.

up..