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I thought this was good... Never having seen your shit before. I liked it. I would't call it dope, only because some of the sentence structure and diction threw me off at points. But I thought it had a good mesage that was delivered well... and it was a descriptive piece. I didn't see much more you needed to include. Good job.
bump
wow.. upping over these garbage OMs.
I really like this piece here it was real deep.I really like the topic you choose and the storyline to go with it.Also it had really good emotion and really good Imagry which is good cuz it brings out the picture of the story.Also your structure was good and you had good wordplay too.I hope to see more stuff from you in the future cuz this was some deep shit here.Keep up the good work.
Agreed. This was vicious. This was one of the better drops of the week. The descriptive word choices you used was amazing. You took this writing to The Next Level. Great vocab was used in the spots needed. Complete writing from top to finish...Quote:
Originally Posted by demolish
boom.
tight. nice peace. lots of energy and imagery. nice nice piece. 10-10
very nice keep em coming............................................ .................................................. ............
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wow... bump bump - too many shit OMs
eventually a piece that aint garbage, all ive read recently is lil fools posting shit... i liked the message behind this, my sorta thing... constructed with a good flow and multis to help it along... nice work mate
hit my latest piece when you get a minute... thnx... pz
Presence felt in the beginning.....NICE wordplay...on some old school Eminem slash JayZ/Nas shit....so I'd HAVE to say it's a good 9.8
chea - one last bump, then I make a new OM.
Hey johnny - how bout replying to something instead of mentioning links to forum noobs who post crap pieces that are disses and shit. Just give them one day then lock the thread...
Great title. Your writing skills definitely support the World Peace Title. You did a great job maintainig a solidified structure and flow. The vocab and word usage was very well chosen...