thanx mcbad but i think it was good for back then but if i sed that now people wuld b like... :wtf:
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thanx mcbad but i think it was good for back then but if i sed that now people wuld b like... :wtf:
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one more rating and ime good...
all of a sudden eryone is sleepin?
Extremely basic...that's all that really comes to mind when you read this...but 2002...that's a long time ago...and by the looks you've elevated since then...
No clue why but that Hike line made me giggle....lol Other than that..structure was decent not good...flow was pretty tiight but the vocab was too basic....and you need 16 lines for an open mic....lol anyways...Peace
Lol i know but the point of this was to get ratings fdor my old book...but u didn't read that part :stupid2: , lol :laugh:
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o0o...whats the matter people too tired to read like...8 lines?
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1) overall rating 1
2) Flow rating 2- I gave you 2 because it atleast rhymes but thats all it does....it has no real writing techniques and is completely pointless from line to line
3) word play rating 0- There is no wordplay...you kids need to learn what the fuck your talking about....and learn what wordplay is
4) structure rating 2- Its only 8 Lines and all ending in simplistic one syallable rhymes
5) critizism and or comments---already added
lmao...i hope u read the part that i was 12 wen i put this together ;-P and that was harsh critisizm