thanx man.. still uppin
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thanx man.. still uppin
upp an dupp and upp and upppppppppp
fuck pharaoh, i didn't know you had this kind of thought goin through your head, thats deeper then most topics i read, good image focused here, nice keep it up.
deeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeep good shit
thnx.
pretty nice poetic touches to this piece, held it together very well
seems like your almost as hard up as me..haha
yeah i can feel the flow coming thru as i read on
click* Wow, 4 tries and no projected bullet, this must be a sign
that God has a plan for me to live happy in due time
This was a bad idea, can't wait to see my wife and kiss her lips
Holy shit what I have i done, my finger slipped!!!
BOOOM!
dope ending fosho
excellent
pz
thanx to all i havent thanked yet
upping.
I didnt really like this peice.
Its like this.. your scheme isnt fluid enough. its choppy and it turns me off to reading it from the beginning. the storyline in this is really..idk. Its down to earth, But its not portrayed well enough. Theres emotion but not enough. Its just lacking. Like theres imagery but not enough imagery. Ya feel? tighten up and go all the way.
Reply to mine ASAP.
it's called Reality Check
thnx......... upping for feed