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letz juss get some votes in hea
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upppin 3..............................
letz juss get some votes in hea
skully- sum of it didnt rhyme at all.....and u gotta rhyme in this otherwise people would just say anything they want.
White- liked ya stuff....if i could vote i would vote for you but i cant so thats lucky for skully.
peace
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"So who wants to hold their own brain", so you gangsta huh? Bout to get bitch slapped
Cuz tha last time u saw a gun u was gettin.....shot at
Man dog...Opening pringals was the only time u be "twistin a lid"...(Bitchslapped thread)link is at the bottom
"So death comes in many forms" that's why i'm dissin u kid....(sig)
HOLY SHYT!...It's Agent Skully from Cali!
So u hea to upgrade RB?...Man u juss gonna upgrade my, win tally
vs
nothin
v/white-virus...dis battle was very wun sided i couldn't even understand da other dudes verse
HIT UP 1 OF DEM LINKS IN MY SIG
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White_Virus
"So who wants to hold their own brain", so you gangsta huh? Bout to get bitch slapped
Cuz tha last time u saw a gun u was gettin.....shot at
horible wording. concept was weak in the first place.
Man dog...Opening pringals was the only time u be "twistin a lid"...(Bitchslapped thread)link is at the bottom
"So death comes in many forms" that's why i'm dissin u kid....(sig)
makes no sense..i can see its supposed to be a personal, but it has no punch involved..it just quotes what his sig says and states that your dissing him. no punchline...nothing clever in this bar at all.
HOLY SHYT!...It's Agent Skully from Cali!
So u hea to upgrade RB?...Man u juss gonna upgrade my, win tally
meh, that line shows you have potential with some good "pause punches" but your wording made the line look noobish and overall just garbage.
I aint gangsta like u dog, keep ya 9's to ya self...
Commin at me witcha bare hand, damn son just recheck ya belt...
no..you tried to hard to make a punch here and came up with nothing. re think the concept...if you struggle that hard with it then dont use it
Give it up pranksta...buying a cd was tha last time u be near a target
Watching dome's explode is ya interest...when u the only one that be gettin retarded
first line is played to death....never use a target line again. and the second line attempted a punch while being personal too...but there was no punchline...and even if there was you prolly wouldnt have related it the personal.
White Virus....i have one thing of advice for you...READ LLL BATTLES!...youve shown that you have grasped the concept of punchlines and personals...reading battles from experianced textees will help you word your punches better and straightin out your structure. and oh yeh..learn how to hyperlink...ask around..pm me if you need too.
agent skully
a yo i be the creep that handles axes
for kids like you with no practice
i wont even leave your ashes blazeing heat that burns through sunglasses
white virus you fall before tyrants your silenced
like pistols blow your dome so your face whistles
like a hot broads walking by you actin hard but your bout to hug your mom and cry
death is coming just remember i be the one gunning and got your whole hood running
skull numing soul stunning pulling triggers by your temples like im deer hunting
spear something that i think is you cause hes missing his hair do
and i tear wigs the rear kicks that connect like mentally unstable kids
suck out your brains like a 300 lb tick
dont speak cause ill snatch your lip bring your first aid kit cause bleeding occures everytime that i spit you should have stayed with grandma and learned how to knit
i see no hope for you in text battling^^.
you must have some potential for me to give you any constructive critisizm. learn what a PUNCHLINE is!
Vote: White_Virus
i cant poll under this name.
but if you would like me too poll under an alias of mine i will. you just have to pm me.
cuz right now im too laz to log out of this name.
upiin
Agent Skully- All I really feel like saying is NO, too many statements in your verse and not enough dissing him. I don't even see any quotables or for that matter, anything that falls under my criteria of a good battle.
White Virus- Well I seen a line or two in there which was hitting on self glory. I don't like that to much, but at least I do have one semi-funny line from you which is;
So who wants to hold their own brain", so you gangsta huh? Bout to get bitch slapped
Cuz tha last time u saw a gun u was gettin.....shot at
But I mean the rest of your verse was kind of meh to me. I mean, just work on your game. Read some tournaments and what not to see how people use the thought process. Put some time into it bro.
V.White-Virus